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Cat Tales...line revisionThey're sugar white with eyes of emerald green,a stately stroll and attitude serene,until they start to preen and lick their rears,then stick their tongues into each other's...
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Charming, Susan.There's a strong tradition of cat poems here, as you may know.(I'm one of the few who like dogs.)Best wishes,David
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Hi Sue, Like David, I am a dog lover...(I still believe a dog is the closest character traits we'll find next to Godliness!) But your delightful poem brings so vividly details the adoring actions of 2...
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A smooth piece from start to finish and the content was a winner from the beginning. I love cats, too.Willi
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Hi David, Liz and Willi..Thanks ya'll, for the thumbs up on this one. David...I do love dogs as well....almost as much as cats. Liz.... I appreciate your thoughts and suggestion on 9&10. Such...
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Wonderful poem. Having a cat myself, I sympathize.        Id like to suggest a bit of grammatical revision on L5 to L6 (Though purring quite contentedly, we know/...
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Hi Jason...Thanks for stopping to offer your comments and suggestions.Quote:Your sentence implies that we (meaning people) are the ones who are purringgood call...thanks for spotting that and letting...
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Sue: I keep meaning to drop in to say how timely your piece was when I read it. Actually, I did but my cat steps on my keyboard when he wants attention and I lost it! He's outside now so this msg....
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Hi Franny...I find such delight in the headlines you fit so well to each of your replies. Opal seems to feel I should be honoured to have her plop down in front of the computer screen for a tummy rub...
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SilverShe sashayed up to me, a beggar-queenall clad in ragged silken fur and weed,a skeleton with hungry eyes as greenas em`ralds, or the shoots of river-reed.For God`s sake, take that cat out of my...
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Willi:This is a delightful cat's tale in honour of the thread.I particularly liked S1, a beggar-queen sashaying is purrfect characterization of a stray cat.I am reminded of the illogic of the...
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Hi Susan,an overall thumbs-up from me too - loved the playful nature of it all.My only nit would be S1L2 with 'attitude serene' - are folks okay with the occasional inversion around these parts?Scotty
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Sue--I've been waiting for this picture to be hosted. These are my boys Charlie & Chicken (Chick's the part Siamese with the "eyes.") hurray for furballs!
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Hi Willi...I love your "Silver" sonnet...wonderful imagery...achingly sad. Thanks for sharing.SueScotty..Thank you for sharing your thoughts on this. I'm not a fan of inversions and rarely use them...
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Sue,In your edit, you've forgotten the capital for Both.Do you think you could avoid the repetition of purr-particularly as it's a rhyme-word?I feel mangled is the wrong word for a hairball, as it...
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Maz...I appreciate the heads-up on 'Both'.re: purr...I hesitated because as you point out, it's best not to overuse a specific verb.I know of no syn. for purr... and it's so cat-like. Each purring...
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Sue,I'd be even more graphic about the hairball eg slimy or still-damp, or fresh-puked..LOL.Regards, Maz
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"hissy-fit." What a perfect choice of words. I have not heard the word in quite a while, but it is so perfect, and I loved to see it in this very charming work. I like the way you explore both sides...
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Did you ever read an anthology of cat poems by great poets, named YOWL ?
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